Fanfiction Feedback! Adult Topics Version

Havoc
Fried Chicken - Attended an april fools event
Artist - shidtist
U Lil Shid - Hi, Im a lil shid.
Chatty Kirin - A shidder who has reached 1000 combined forum shids or comments.
Liberty Belle - Shids the song of the unshidded

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Post your ideas, drafts, etc for fanfiction with and about adult topics such as horror, politics, high fantasy, and the likes.
DragonSam98
Fried Chicken - Attended an april fools event

@Havoc
 
I figured. XD
 
This story is basically an AU Crossover of Attack on Titan, and MLP. It’s also meant to be an alternate ending to season 9, as well as a what if for both AoT and MLP.
 
I’ve written it in a way that’s fairly easy to follow, even if you’ve never seen either show. I have IRL friends who’ve enjoyed it. ^^
 
As far as feedback goes, I’ll take anything. :P
 
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1yGq0p1VnOPKjMk0Ce8q6ucWuvvMZoqnA4VetbSfqRJ0/edit?usp=sharing
Sapphie
Rampant Bear - A courageous companion
Autist -
Chatty Kirin - A user who has reached a combined 1000 forum posts or comments.
Lil Importer Shid - Hi, Im a lil shid.
Liberty Belle - Sings the song of the unchained

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Oh, I’m a bit late to the party, but I have a long fic I’m working on. Link.
 
It’s meant to be disturbing, bleak, and depressing so I know it’s far from everybody’s cup of tea.
 
Still, it has quite a few dislikes, and I’m wondering what I could be doing better. I obviously won’t change plot important aspects retroactively, but I’d still appreciate some feedback on it, if only to know what to look out for in the future.
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